The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart illustrates the distribution of how families spent their weekly budget in a certain country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, food expenses
were
noticeably outweighed Unnecessary verb
apply
to
other Change preposition
apply
expenses
in 1968, while
leisure purchases took the lead in 2018. Household good
Fix the agreement mistake
goods
expenses
, on the other hand
, remained its same
level in both years.
Regarding food Correct article usage
the same
expenses
, they had the vast majority of weekly costs with 35% in 1968, however
, it dropped steeply to approximately 20% in 2018. Fuel and power charges showed the
similar trend as well, but there was a slight decrement Correct article usage
a
with
about 2%. Change preposition
of
Also
, clothing and footware
and personal Correct your spelling
footwear
good
charges halved between 1968 and 2018.
Turning to housing Fix the agreement mistake
goods
expenses
, there was a noticeable rising pattern from 10% to slightly under 20%. Similarly
, transport costs increased by nearly 7%, whereas
leisure purchases rose sharply from just under the
10% to approximately 22%. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, household charges levelled off with nearly 8%.Submitted by silaaltundag5 on
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