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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.
#data #railway #systems #six #cities #date #km #routes #passagers #numbers #year #millions
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Government
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 actions like investing in public
transport
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 systems and reducing public
transport
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 ticket prices will help to reduce
transport
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 pollution very well. I completely agree with
this
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 statement. Improved public
transport
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 with cheaper prices will stop
people
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 from using private
transport
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, and the
transport
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 population will decrease significantly.
First,
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public
transport
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 is one of the most important things in a country, and the
government
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 should invest more. The
government
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 should start cleaning
the
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public
transport
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 more often; there are a lot of
people
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 who catch a disease from
buses
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 and trains.
People
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 who use their own cars rather than public
transport
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's biggest reason is
this
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 hygiene problem.
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, in Italy, most of the bus windows are locked because of the danger issues, and
buses
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 smell so bad.
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the highest amount of
people
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 prevent public
transport
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 because of the seats. The number of seats in public
transport
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 is not enough, and they are not comfortable, which causes a real problem for
people
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 with back pain. The personal and comfortable space
people
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 have in their personal cars outweighs the
buses
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.
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, trains in Turkey
have
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 not enough seats. Exhausted young workers and older
people
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 argue about
this
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 seat problem the most.
This
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 is one of the strongest reasons that force young
people
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 to use private
transport
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. In conclusion, the
government
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 should start investing more in public
transport
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. The hygiene and space problems should be solved to increase the number of
people
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 that use public
transport
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. They can start
with
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by
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 cleaning the
buses
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 more often and
reorganise
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reorganising
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 the hygiene rules.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, transport, people, buses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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