It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is important for a human to know proper morals and ethics in order to make correct decisions in the future (whether near or far),

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are expected to be taught the differences between the "rights and wrongs" in

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thoroughly.

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gentle teaching could stick in a

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's brain, experiencing punishment may be deemed

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more effective as

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try their best to avoid getting in trouble,

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allowing the lesson taught to never leave their

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the famous quote "learn from your mistakes" which suggests the

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that

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will learn what and what not to do from natural consequences, I

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do agree that some form of light punishment on a

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could be a much more effective and quicker method in helping them understand the rights and wrongs in

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taking toys away, getting snack privileges revoked, reducing

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, or even time-outs as those are the

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that I grew up with and those

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itself has certainly helped me draw a line between right and wrong actions like telling the truth or never stealing.

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, I certainly do not agree with the

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punishments

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that affect the physical health of

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as starvation or hitting.

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itself is immoral and could be a problem for generations to come, which defeats the entire purpose of teaching

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morals and ethics. I

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do not agree with the

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of revoking necessities in a

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as forcing them to sleep outside of the house or limiting social interactions for the same reason. All in all, teaching

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morals and ethics is now a parental responsibility and it is up to the adults in a

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the RIGHT steps to teach them

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an important

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skill. As mentioned earlier, parents and teachers can put their

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on short-term time outs or reduce their playtime before gently relaying the

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to never repeat the same mistake again for the sake of a better future.

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's ethical understanding, but

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discipline and all in all respect for another.

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Your response is clear and well-written. However, you can improve your task achievement by providing more in-depth analysis or discussing alternative viewpoints to enhance the complexity of your argument.

coherence cohesion

Though the essay is logically structured, you could improve your coherence by using a wider range of cohesive devices to connect sentences and paragraphs seamlessly.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument effectively.

task achievement

You provide relevant examples, such as personal childhood experiences with punishment methods, which strengthen your argument.

task achievement

Your discussion avoids endorsing harmful punishment methods, reflecting a mature approach to the topic and showing awareness of potential ethical issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Finally
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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