The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.
The charts
displays
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the
employment
proportions of men and women in three countries between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
,
Canada
, South
Korea
and
Sweden
are dominated with the
employment
of
males
in both 2005 and 2015. Deriving from
this
trend, a significant rise in
percentage
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the percentage
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of female
employment
can be
further
observed
for
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Canada
and
Sweden
. In 2005,
Canada
,
Sweden
, and South
Korea
had just below 40%, above 40%, and 30% respectively, in terms of working females. All experiencing the same trend, an increase in
percentage
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the percentage
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of female
employment
to around 50% for
Canada
and precisely 50% for
Sweden
whereas
aroung
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around
37% for South
Korea
. An inclining trend can be observed in the proportion of working
males
in
Canada
and South
Korea
. Previously with around 60%
males
in 2005 transforming into a 70% of
males
employeed
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employed
.
However
,
Sweden
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in Sweden
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male employees had gone through a decrease in
fraction
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a fraction
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of the
countires
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countries
employment
. Previously with just below 80% into 70% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, canada, korea, sweden, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • percentages
  • employment
  • countries
  • 2005
  • 2015
  • trends
  • differences
  • changes
  • men
  • women
  • variations
  • patterns
  • significant
  • observations
  • summarize
  • findings
  • predictions
  • future trends
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