These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Discuss both views and give reasons.

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for tourism has become
popular
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more popular
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recently than before.
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essay will discuss some of the
reasons
for
this
trend. One of the
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reasons
for
this
is the low cost airline raveling companies which
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traveling
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experience with less
speending
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spending
,
moreover
,
this
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companies
has
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provided more options for people with limited baduget to
purcheses
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purchase
purchases
a cheap tickets
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as a result
they can travel more often ,
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, pople with a small budget could use a travel companise like eassy jet to travel a broead duting holiday with less fees for tickets . Another reason is online
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flexible
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acommodation
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accommodation
selection to choose
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,
in addition
, people could select their type of
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residence
or
accomodation
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accommodation
through online booking so they can choose it
acoreding
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according
to their
need
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needs
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and affordability s
weather
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whether
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they are a family or a
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couples
couple
with out
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without
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speending
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spending
too much in
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unstable
apratment
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apartment
,
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, many
indiviuals
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individuals
would use
an applications
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applications
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like air BnB to book their holiday
apratments
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apartments
apartment
acording
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according
to their family need
an
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preferens
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preferences
preference
like having a pool or how many rooms they need. In
concusion
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conclusion
, traveling become more common among
poeple
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people
than before,for many
reasons
and some of those
reasons
are,
low cost
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traveling
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companies , and more online accommodation
application
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applications
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which
helps
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help
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travelars
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travellers
to choose what is best for them.
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Be sure to check your grammar and spelling, as numerous errors appear throughout the essay. Words such as 'main' (instead of 'mean'), 'companies' (instead of 'companise'), 'spending' (instead of 'speending'), and 'accommodation' (instead of 'accomodation') need correction.
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Use more complex and varied sentence structures. This helps the essay flow better and makes the points more compelling.
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Further elaborate your points and provide more relevant examples to strengthen your argument.
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The essay effectively highlights key reasons such as low-cost airlines and online accommodation booking for the increased ease of travel.
coherence cohesion
The structure is clear and contains a conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.
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The use of examples like 'easyJet' and 'AirBnB' adds relevance and specificity to your points.

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