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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the
production
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 of
energy
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 from coal in
Sweden
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, France, Denmark and Germany between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
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, the percentage of
energy
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 produced from coal declined in all four countries over the timeframe. There was a dramatic fall in
the
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production
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 in Denmark and Germany. Denmark’s
production
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 of
energy
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 from coal stood at 60% in 1995, higher than the other four countries.
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,
production
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 levels dropped sharply over the next 15 years to finish at 10% in 2010, which was the lowest of that year.
Energy
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production
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 from coal in Germany followed a similar pattern, beginning the
period
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 at just under 60% and falling significantly, though unlike Denmark it fell to a low of only 5% in 2007 and
then
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 increased again to approximately 18%.
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,
Sweden
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 and France saw more moderate falls over the
period
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. 35% of
energy
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 came from coal in
Sweden
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 in 1995, and
this
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 proportion gradually declined over the
period
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 to finish at approximately 28% in 2010, the highest of the four countries,
while
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 the percentage produced in France remained just under that of
Sweden
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 over the 15-year
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, sweden, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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