the graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of elderly
people
whose ages are 65 and above from 1940 to 2040 in Japan, Sweden and the USA
.
The number
of elderly people
in the USA
started at 9% in 1940, then
the number
increased to exactly 15% over the next 40 years. Since then
, the percentage decreased by 1% until 2020 before rising drastically to about 23% at the end
of the period.
More or less 7% of the Swedish people
were over 65 years old. Sweden shared the same trend with the USA
until 1990 with a gap of 1% below. Nevertheless
, the population of ageing people
went up to precisely 20% before 2020. It is predicted that the population will drop by 2% followed by a rise to slightly above 25% in 2040.
5% of the Japanese population was old, yet the number
dropped by 3% in the next few decades. The trend shifted in 1990 when the number
of old citizens gradually hiked to 10% in 2030 and is expected to surge to 27% in 2040.
In summary, although
Japan started as the lowest country with ageing people
, it will surpass both the USA
and Sweden at the end
of the period.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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