The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedon, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedon, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates
average
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CO2 emissions per human in the UK, Sweden, Portugal, and Italy from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Italy and Portugal had an increase,
while
the United
KIngdom
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Kingdom
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and Sweden showed
an
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a
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decrease. In 1967, Italy with just above 4
million
tonnes
was in
the
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third place on
this
chart, but it presented a gradual
grew up
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to just over 6
millions
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million
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in 1977. It
is
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contiuned
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continued
to
rising
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rise
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and reached
his
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its
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peak
point
at just under 8
million
after 20 years and was stable at
this
level until the end of
period
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.
In addition
, Portugal
also
had the lowest
point
at nearly 1
million
at the beginning of the period, and it went up to approximately 3
million
and soared to around 5
million
, in the years 1987 and 1997, respectively.
Moreover
, the UK had the highest
point
at about 11
million
in
the
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1967 and was stable for one decade, but it started
fell
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to fall
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slowly
after
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time to time and reached
his
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its
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minimum
point
at almost 9
million
tonnes
.
Finally
, Sweden was the second
significant
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most significant
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country with roughly 9
million
tonnes
and it
drammaticaly
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dramatically
rose to nearly 10
million
. It started to
went
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down
with
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reaching around 7
million
tonnes
in 1987 and after
steady
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a steady
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fell
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fall
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20
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for 20
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years, it
got
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reached
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his
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its
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lowest number at just under 6
million
tonnes
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes, point with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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