Some university students move away and live on their own while they are attending school, but others live at home with their family while they are students. Which do you think is a better choice? Give reasons to explain your answer.
Nowaday
, Correct your spelling
Nowadays
Students
' university
living place
are Fix the agreement mistake
places
divied
Correct your spelling
divided
in to
two groups which are living at home, and livingJoin the words
into
by
their own. In my perspective, Change preposition
on
university
students
should live at home, if it is possible due to
couple
of aspects, including precious Change the article
a couple
time
sharing with and emotion
support from family.
Family Replace the word
emotional
time
is essential for everyone especially
with parents. Add the comma(s)
, especially
Nowaday
, people tend to have less family Correct your spelling
Nowadays
time
with your
family when each individual Correct pronoun usage
their
get
older, Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
therefore
university
life
might be the last
chapter of your life
without any other responsibilities like work and marriage. For Instance
, in Thailand, the research found that more than 70 percent
of Thai people Change the spelling
per cent
are living
in Wrong verb form
live
Correct article usage
a nucleus
nucleus
family after they Replace the word
nuclear
got
married, around 27 years old. These show that Thai people might have Wrong verb form
get
time
living
with their Change the verb form
to live
parent
for less than four years after their graduation.
Fix the agreement mistake
parents
Moreover
, many students
also
want some emotional supports
from their family or Fix the agreement mistake
support
sibling
. In Fix the agreement mistake
siblings
university
life
which is more intense than high school life
, especially with tough faculties like Engineering and Medicine. In these two faculty
, Replace the word
faculties
students
have to face peer pressure from their genius friends, apart from various intensive courses, hence
it is better for them to have another source of emotion
support other than their college friends. To elaborate, many Replace the word
emotional
case
of Change to a plural noun
cases
medical
Add an article
a medical
student
who Fix the agreement mistake
students
living
by themselves in Thailand have reported about Wrong verb form
live
commited
suicide from stress, Correct your spelling
committed
while
none of medical
student who Add an article
the medical
living
with their family has Wrong verb form
live
once
.
In conclusion, in my Correct your spelling
one
opinion
living at home with family is a better choice for every Add a comma
opinion,
university
students
, supported by two main reasons. One is having more leisure Fix the agreement mistake
student
time
with their family and sibling
, and another is to gain another source of emotional Fix the agreement mistake
siblings
supports
which is not from your friends.Fix the agreement mistake
support
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