The internet has made knowledge immediately available through computers and smartphones all over the world. Much of the information is free. Discuss the both advantages and drawbacks of this trend.

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It is undeniable that with the help of the internet, people can access pieces of information anywhere and anytime through their computers and phones for free. Some people believe that
this
trend is bringing drawbacks.
However
, others believe in a different light.
This
essay will discuss both benefits and disadvantages. Nowadays, people use the internet to look for information, from basic knowledge like recipes and know-how to specific information
such
as world economic or political news.
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task achievement
Make sure to address both advantages and disadvantages equally in your essay. Currently, the text is mostly an introduction without diving into specific points.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of the essay by adding transitional phrases and clear connectors between points to make the ideas easier to follow.
task achievement
The introduction is clear and sets up the topic well.
coherence cohesion
The language used is appropriate and understandable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization of information
  • self-improvement opportunities
  • communication and collaboration
  • geographic locations
  • proliferation of information technology
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • privacy issues
  • data security concerns
  • widespread availability
  • personal information
  • digital divide
  • social inequalities
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