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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The supplied table and pie chart
indicates
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 data about the capitalism of
police
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 in 2017 and 2018 in a region of the UK and
also
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 the
amount
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 of
expenditure
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 on various sections. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
amount
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 of
budget
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 source was from
national
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the national
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 government.
However
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, other sources did not have
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budget
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a budget
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 as much as others.
Moreover
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, the highest percentage of
money
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expenditure
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 was for salaries (officers and staff). Whilst, Technology was the lowest
amount
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 of spending
money
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 in the area of Britain over the period. In 2018, 177.8 million Euros was given to
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police
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the police
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 office
from
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by
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national
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the national
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 government
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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in a region of the UK, (which was the highest
amount
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 of
budget
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 over the period) just ahead of the
amount
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 of
budget
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 for
this
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 office
that
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which
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 was 175.5 million Euros in 2017.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of
money
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 spent
for
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on
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 the salaries of
police
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 officers and staff was 75% in 2017, (which was the highest
amount
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 of
money
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spending
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spent
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 over the whole year) compared to the
amount
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 of
money
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expenditure
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for
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on
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this
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 job at 69% in Britain in 2018.
In contrast
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, other sources
such
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 as grants did not allocate much
budget
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 to
police
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 with 38 million Euros in 2017. (Which was the lowest
amount
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 of
money
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 given over the period).
Additionally
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, only a tiny fraction of
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police
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the police
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budget
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 was spent on technology in
police
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 at 8% in the UK in 2017. (Which was the
least
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lowest
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 percentage of
money
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expenditure
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 over the whole year).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, amount, expenditure, budget, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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