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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The supplied table and pie chart
indicates
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 data about the capitalism of
police
 in 2017 and 2018 in a region of the UK and
also
 the
amount
 of
expenditure
 on various sections. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
amount
 of
budget
 source was from
national
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the national
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 government.
However
, other sources did not have
budget
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a budget
the budget
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 as much as others.
Moreover
, the highest percentage of
money
expenditure
 was for salaries (officers and staff). Whilst, Technology was the lowest
amount
 of spending
money
 in the area of Britain over the period. In 2018, 177.8 million Euros was given to
police
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the police
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 office
from
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by
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national
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the national
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 government
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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in a region of the UK, (which was the highest
amount
 of
budget
 over the period) just ahead of the
amount
 of
budget
 for
this
 office
that
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which
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 was 175.5 million Euros in 2017.
Furthermore
, the percentage of
money
 spent
for
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 the salaries of
police
 officers and staff was 75% in 2017, (which was the highest
amount
 of
money
spending
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spent
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 over the whole year) compared to the
amount
 of
money
expenditure
for
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on
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this
 job at 69% in Britain in 2018.
In contrast
, other sources
such
 as grants did not allocate much
budget
 to
police
 with 38 million Euros in 2017. (Which was the lowest
amount
 of
money
 given over the period).
Additionally
, only a tiny fraction of
police
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the police
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budget
 was spent on technology in
police
 at 8% in the UK in 2017. (Which was the
least
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lowest
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 percentage of
money
expenditure
 over the whole year).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, amount, expenditure, budget, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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