The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts compare the
source
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sources
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of
electircal
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electrical
generation in
France
and
Germany
in 2009. focusing on all types of
energy
and renewables
one
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.
Overall
, it is evident that conventional thermal
energy
was the dominant
source
in
Germany
,
while
France
mostly relied on nuclear power.
However
, in terms of
renewables
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renewable sources
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source
,
biomass
mainly
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used by
Germany
,
whereas
France
heavily utilized hydroelectric power. In 2009,
Germany
generated 59.6% of its electricity from conventional thermal sources, followed by 23% from nuclear
energy
. Renewable sources with 17.4 % with
biomass
accounting for the largest proportion at 80.5%, followed by wind at 36.9% and
hydroelectic
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hydroelectric
at 17.7%. Solar
energy
and
geotherml
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geothermal
played a minor role with 6.1% and 0.0%, respectively.
In contrast
,
France
relied
primarly
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primarily
on nuclear power, which
accouted
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accounted
accounts
for 76% of its electricity production. Renewable
energy
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source
made up
with
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13.7% and conventional thermal
source
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sources
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contributed
to
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10.3%. In terms of renewables, hydroelectric was dominant at 80.5%,
while
wind and
biomass
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for 10.5% and 8.1%, respectively. Similar to
Germany
, solar and geothermal
energy
were the least significant, at 0.9% and 0.0%. In summary, conventional thermal and nuclear
energy
dominated electricity generation in
Germany
and
France
, respectively, with
biomass
and hydroelectric being the most used renewable sources in each country. Solar and geothermal remained negligible in both countries.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words source, france, germany, energy, biomass with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • generation
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • output levels
  • break down
  • hydroelectric
  • biomass
  • reliance
  • significant differences
  • unexpected findings
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