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The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the adaptations in the village named Kelsbey between the years 1780 and 2000.
Overall
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, the farmlands and woods areas were shrunken year by year,
while
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 the area of
houses
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, schools, and sports fields had expanded over 2 centuries. First of all, the number of
houses
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 doubled to 200
houses
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,
on the contrary
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, the farmlands were halved from 1780 to 1860.
Moreover
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, the forest had a dramatically smaller area in 1860 than in 1780. A new road from the village to the
river
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 was constructed with a bridge to cross that
river
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 in 1860.
On the other hand
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, the population continued to grow until 2000, and the number of
houses
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 increased more than doubled to 500. In 2000, the schools and sports fields were built in the areas that became empty after destroying the farmlands and trees.
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, some shops and a wetland for birds were built east of the
river
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 and south of the
river
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 respectively. It can be seen the second road from the village to the facilities was structured
in
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 more than a hundred years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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