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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The following two maps illustrate a
city
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hospital
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hospital's
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accessability
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accessibility
 by roads in 2010, compared to 2007. At first glance, it is evident that
although
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 numerous changes had
accured
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accrued
acquired
occurred
 from 2007 to 2010, the main roads, including Ring
Road
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, Hospital
Road
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 and
City
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Road
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 had remained unchanged over these 3 years. Looking at the details, two roundabouts had been added to Hospital
Road
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, one in the
begenning
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beginning
 and
other
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the other
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at the end
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 of it.
Additionally
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, Bus stops had been extended to a Bus station
in
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on
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 the west side of Hospital
Road
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. Another interesting point is that the car park which had been used by both staff and
public
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the public
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 in 2007, had been turned to be "staff-only" three years later. Following that, a new car park place for
public
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the public
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had been
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was
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 built right next to
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City
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the City
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 Hospital.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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road
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 access to
City
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 Hospitals
had
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has
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 been improved
during
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over
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 three years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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