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The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the development of a village called Bunborough from the current time to the future of 2024.
Overall
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, it is evident that there will
a
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be a
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major transformation of housing and commercial
area
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, and it is predicted to have a remarkable
changing
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 in the transportation facilities. In the present day, Bunborough village had a
road
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 that
connecting
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connected
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Maychester
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Manchester
 and Lynwich, and it was
also
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 connected to the commercial
area
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.
While
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 the housing
area
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 was adjacent to the
road
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, a large fishing port was located on the southern
side
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 of the shop buildings. The port had a beach
area
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 on its
southweast
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southwest
southeast
south-east
 and the port flowed crossing the
road
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 on the west
side
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. By 2024, there will
a
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new
road
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 branch which will be connected the commercial
area
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 directly to the
road
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 to Lynwich. A gas station will be spotted on the junction
as well as
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 a hotel.
While
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 some houses will
moved
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be moved
move
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 to the northern
side
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, a new hotel will appear near the beach.
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this
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 year, a railway is expected to
built
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be built
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 to connect the residents'
area
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 to the southern
side
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 of the map.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Anticipation
  • Significant
  • Conversion
  • Commercial activities
  • Expansion
  • Enhancing
  • Bypassing
  • Congestion
  • Connectivity
  • Recreational area
  • Demolition
  • Infrastructure
  • Preservation
  • Public transportation hub
  • Encourage
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