The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and charts below illustrate data on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in Britain.
Overall
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, we can see that the table clarifies information about what is the sources of the
money
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,
However
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, the chart explains where the
money
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spent. In both years National Government was the main source of the police budget with around 17.5
million
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and 177.8
million
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for 2017 and 2018.
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Other sources (eg grants) contributed around 28
million
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in 2017 and 38.5
million
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in 2018 as the lowest source of
money
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. Local taxes
also
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contributed a large amount of 92.2
million
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in 2017 and a little over 100
million
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in 2018. Salaries of officers and staff took around three
quarter
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of the
money
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in 2017 at 75
percent
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per cent
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and in 2018 at 69
percent
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per cent
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.
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,
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apply
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Buildings and transport took around 17 per cent for both years with limited change on the amount of
money
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. Technology
had
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seen a significant rise as in 2017 it was 8 per cent.
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, in 2018 it was almost double with around 14 per cent of the total spent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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