The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure shows the popularity of activities among members in the social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
The
flim
Correct your spelling
film
club
showed the highest members
during 20 years, and it reduced 10 Correct quantifier usage
number of members
people
from 2000 to 2005. But at that time, the number of the
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apply
people
in the amateur dramatics club
increased nearly
10.
After 2005, the Change preposition
by nearly
amateur dramatics
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Amateur Dramatics Club
club
rapidly fell down to 5 people
. On the contrary
, the
table tennis started to Correct article usage
apply
flactuate
from 20 to over 50 members. Correct your spelling
fluctuate
Also
, the quantity
of Change the quantifier
number
people
who enrolled the
musical performances Change preposition
in the
had been
higher Wrong verb form
was
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than over
over
10 Change preposition
than
people
.
The material arts and flim
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film
club
had little changes for 20 years. Before 2010, the flim
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film
club
decuced
from 70 to 60 and the material arts Correct your spelling
decreased
also
decreased 45
to around 30 Change preposition
from 45
people
. In 2010, the material arts increased approximately
40 Change preposition
by approximately
people
. After 1 year, it reduced but the flim
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film
club
increased 5
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by 5
people
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