The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The pie chart illustrates the average proportions of three types of nutrients commonly found in meals, each of which can be harmful when consumed in excess.
Overall
,
it is clear that
dinner and
snacks
had higher percentages of
sodium
and added
sugar
,
while
breakfast
remained at a steady level across all three nutrient types. In general, dinner accounts for 43% of daily
sodium
intake, making it the largest contributor, followed by saturated fat at 37%, and
then
23% for added
sugar
.
Additionally
,
breakfast
and
snacks
had the same percentage of
sodium
,
while
the proportions of saturated fat in
breakfast
and
snacks
showed no significant change compared to
sodium
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However
, added
sugar
in
snacks
made up the largest intake at 42%, playing a major role.
Moreover
, the proportions of saturated fat and added
sugar
in
breakfast
were both at 16%. Focusing on lunch, the proportion of
sodium
accounts for 29%, with saturated fat being 3% lower than
sodium
,
while
added
sugar
makes up only 19% of the total in lunch.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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