Some argue that we should use cleaner energy sources to protect the environment, even though they are more expensive than traditional energy sources like coal and oil. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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agree because it's much healthier
to
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the
environment
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disagree because using
a cheaper options
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cheaper options
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is much more sustainable for all different types of
people
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of all classes The extended use of coal and oil these days
definately
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effects
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our
environment
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in
negative
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way, there are
lot's
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of
diffrent
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ways to produce
energy
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thru cleaner sources to protect the
environment
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but, In my opinion, to agree or disagree with the
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statment
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statement

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that we should use cleaner
energy
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to protect the
environment
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is an important issue to discuss.
First,
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I will present some arguments supporting
this
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statement, after which, some aspects against that will be discussed On the one hand, many
people
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agree with
this
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statment
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statement

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for many important reasons. The most significant is that cleaner
energy
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is much
more
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apply

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healthier
to
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the
environment
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.
For instance
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, using a
battery powered
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battery-powered

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car can be much more
helthier
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healthier

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for the
environment
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then
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standered
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gas power car. Another key reason is that cleaner
energy
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sources
reduses
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reduces
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global warming.
On the other hand
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, other
people
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oppose
this
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Use synonyms
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statment
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statement

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for many reasons. The most important reason is that using coal and oil which are
concidered
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considered

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a
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an

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un-clean way of producing
energy
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is much
more
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apply

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cheaper than cleaner
energy
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sources. As an example in the production of food using a
gas powered
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stove is much cheaper than using
a
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an

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electrical stove. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea
supporting
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this
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statment
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statement

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because its
drawback
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drawbacks

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outweigh
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its benefits,
for instance
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, using a cheaper option is much more sustainable for all different types of
people
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of all classes.
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Review your essay for small spelling and grammar mistakes, such as 'effect' vs. 'affect,' 'diffrent' vs. 'different,' 'statment' vs. 'statement,' etc. These errors may be minor but can detract from the overall quality of your writing.
Specific
Developing your points further with more detailed examples and explanations will make your argument stronger. For instance, while you mentioned that cleaner energy reduces global warming, you could elaborate on how this happens and provide more specific data or examples.
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Enhance the essay’s logical structure by clearly showing how each point leads to the next. You can use connectives and transitional phrases to improve the flow between paragraphs and within them.
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You have a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a good overall structure for your essay.
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Your essay considers both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
Specific
The raising of key issues such as the health benefits of cleaner energy and the economic considerations for people of different classes adds depth to the discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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