Some argue that we should use cleaner energy sources to protect the environment, even though they are more expensive than traditional energy sources like coal and oil. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
agree because it's much healthier
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environment
disagree because using a cheaper options
is much more sustainable for all different types of Correct the article-noun agreement
cheaper options
a cheaper option
people
of all classes
The extended use of coal and oil these days definately
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definitely
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affects
environment
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different
energy
thru cleaner sources to protect the environment
but, In my opinion, to agree or disagree with the statment
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energy
to protect the environment
is an important issue to discuss. First,
I will present some arguments supporting this
statement, after which, some aspects against that will be discussed
On the one hand, many people
agree with this
statment
for many important reasons. The most significant is that cleaner Correct your spelling
statement
energy
is much more
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apply
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for
environment
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battery-powered
helthier
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healthier
environment
then
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than
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gas power car. Another key reason is that cleaner Correct your spelling
standard
energy
sources reduses
global warming.
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reduces
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On the other hand
, other people
oppose this
statment
for many reasons. The most important reason is that using coal and oil which are Correct your spelling
statement
concidered
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considered
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un-clean way of producing Change the article
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energy
is much more
cheaper than cleaner Change the word
apply
energy
sources. As an example in the production of food using a gas powered
stove is much cheaper than using Add a hyphen
gas-powered
a
electrical stove.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea Change the article
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this
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because its Correct your spelling
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drawbacks
outweigh
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, using a cheaper option is much more sustainable for all different types of people
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Developing your points further with more detailed examples and explanations will make your argument stronger. For instance, while you mentioned that cleaner energy reduces global warming, you could elaborate on how this happens and provide more specific data or examples.
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Enhance the essay’s logical structure by clearly showing how each point leads to the next. You can use connectives and transitional phrases to improve the flow between paragraphs and within them.
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You have a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a good overall structure for your essay.
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Your essay considers both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
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The raising of key issues such as the health benefits of cleaner energy and the economic considerations for people of different classes adds depth to the discussion.
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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