The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.

The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.
chart
provides key information about the average annual
water
consumption
kilolitre for each house in a number of cities like
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Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra .The pie
chart
shows the distribution of Australian
water
consumption
by the year 2014.
Overall
, it is clear to the naked eye that the majority of
water
consumption
is to agriculture businesses, with more than two-thirds of the total
water
consumption
in the whole country.
However
when it comes to the most H2O
consumption
we can see on the top of the
chart
is Perth in the first place, with about 330 kilolitre. 
On the other hand
, it is a surprise to see
such
a massive city like Melbourne in the back with Canberra with
no
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much difference between them.
Nevertheless
, there are
also
some medium cities competing on
this
chart
.
For instance
, Adelaide, and Brisbane, both of them have a massive
water
consumption
than average.
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