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The table below shows the population (in millions)of 8 countries in 2008 and 2018 . It also shows the percentage growth in population between these two dates.

The table below shows the population (in millions)of 8 countries in 2008 and 2018 . It also shows the percentage growth in population between these two dates.
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The given table illustrates the
population
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 growth in eight nations between 2008 and 2018 over a decade.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the diagram the
population
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 of Brazil, Canada, Angola, Pakistan, and Nigeria
was
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increased and Russia’s was unchanged.
However
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, the number of citizens
were
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 decreased
of
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 Japan and Romania in ten years. It is conspicuous that the major boost of people was from Nigeria they had
158million
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158 million
 in 2008, which inclined to 208
million
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 in 2018, nearly half.
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, Pakistan’s
population
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 was 173
million
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 in 2008, it increased to 209
million
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 in 2018, 21% expanded from the previous year.
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, Nigeria showed
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% increment in 2018, it had 158
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 in 2008. Probing ahead, Russia
,
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 did not show any change in the ten
year
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, they had 143
million
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 in both the years.
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, Japan’s citizens were 128
million
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 in 2008, which fell gently to 126
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 in 2018 and Romania’s
population
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was
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plummeted from 20
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 to 19
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 in 2018, which was lower than Japan’s residents.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • standout statistics
  • magnitude of change
  • economic expansion
  • improved healthcare
  • aging population
  • emigration
  • regional patterns
  • anomalies
  • infrastructure
  • governance
  • global demographics
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