Some people feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and gives your opinion.

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a hot topic that the cities should be designed to be beautiful or
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functional
.Different people hold different opinions, some citizens believe that
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beautiful
cities are better than
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functional
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;
while
others hold that
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functionality
is the most important thing for a
city
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I
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the former. One side
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that considering the functionality is the most critical when
design
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a
city
. our
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daily
life whether can live soomthly or
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depend
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on the transportation
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system
healthcare \educational
facibilities
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facilities
and so on. If the designer
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most
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attention
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the
city
's beauty
instead
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their functionality probably
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to some common problems but
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definitely
bring some negative impact on our
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,
such
as traffic congestion \
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treatment
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old people .
On the other hand
, it is
ture
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true
that a beautiful
apperance
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appearance
of a
city
can provide a mount of advantages for people as well.
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and attractive environment can offer residents
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good mood,
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architecture can help
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economic development with the rising fame .
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Functionality
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a dominant position,
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the
desiger
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designer
have
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a
responsbility
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responsibility
to balance
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beauty and
functionlity
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functionality
in order to bring
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better development for the whole
city
and the citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • enhance the quality of life
  • architecture
  • public spaces
  • sense of pride
  • overall well-being
  • functionality
  • efficient transportation systems
  • accessible healthcare
  • educational facilities
  • well-organized infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • affordable housing
  • public services
  • striking a balance
  • enhanced living experience
  • blending aspects
  • efficient services
  • pleasing surroundings
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