Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
There is an ongoing debate about whether
boys
and girls
should be separated in different schools
. Some people
believe children will get more advantages from mixed schools
, while
others argue that separate
students Replace the word
separating
in
Change preposition
by
gender
is a wiser decision. This
essay agrees that boys
and Change noun form
boys'
boy's
girls
Change noun form
girls'
girl's
study
will have more advantages.
Children Fix the agreement mistake
studies
attend
mixed Correct pronoun usage
who attend
schools
will get more advantages than in
separate Correct pronoun usage
those in
schools
. The former provides more opportunities for young people
to know the other gender
. Our socity
is constructed by both genders. Everyone needs to know how to stay with others, no matter who is male or female. They will go to work after Correct your spelling
society
graduate
. Replace the word
graduation
The society
will not separate males and females Correct article usage
Society
in
anywhere. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, in addition
to few
special places, Correct article usage
a few
such
as army
, the most regular Add an article
the army
vancancies
have no demand Correct your spelling
vacancies
about
Change preposition
for
gender
, which means men and women need to work together.
However
, some people
think that we should separate boys
and girls
in different schools
, because this
is an effecient
way to prevent children Correct your spelling
efficient
to fall
in love Change preposition
from falling
in
too young Change preposition
at
age
. In fact, Correct article usage
an age
such
method
cannot stop loving issues Correct article usage
a method
happend
in Correct your spelling
happening
schools
, between boys
or between girls
. The developement
of Correct your spelling
development
education
system allows Correct article usage
the education
people
to spend more and more years to be educated. Teenagers being in love is a normal rather than shameful thing and we should use a more inclusive view to face such
phenomenon.
In conclusion, students will obtain more benefits to study
in mixed Change preposition
from studying
schools
. Although
separate schools
could stop teenagers to fall
in love, Change preposition
from falling
this
is not a
inclusive view, Change the article
an
whereas
Correct article usage
a mixed
mixed
Add a hyphen
mixed-gender
gender
environment could help young people
better know how to cooperate with the other gender
in their future workplaces.Submitted by 2587729786 on
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the main points that will be discussed. Your stance should be clearly indicated from the beginning.
coherence cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph logically flows from one to the next, and that the ideas within paragraphs are clearly and coherently connected.
task achievement
Provide more relevant and specific examples to support your main points. This would make your argument stronger and more convincing.
overall quality
Check for grammatical errors, and use a variety of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging.
overall quality
You have a clear introduction and conclusion which are relevant to the discussion and summarize your stance well.
task achievement
You have presented both views and provided your opinion, which addresses the task requirement effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains logical points and attempts to explain why mixed schools are beneficial and why separate schools might be favored by some.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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