The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.
The bar chart illustrates and compares the average
time
spent during a day for 15-19 years old
teenagers and Correct your spelling
19-year-old
eldly
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elderly
people
over 75 in the United States in 2015.
Watching TV took the largest proportion of time
for both groups. Seniors spent 4.5 hours
on it, while
young people
spent 2 hours
less but it still
nearly two and Add a missing verb
was still
half
Correct article usage
a half
hours
.
For the rest of activities
, the two groups Correct article usage
the activities
presents
significant differences. Playing games, socialising and sports Change the verb form
present
also
took relatively
large part of teenagers' Add an article
a relatively
time
that are 1.1 hours
, three quaters
and 0.6 Correct your spelling
quarters
hours
respectively. As for the elderly group, they would rather to
do reading (1 hour), communicating (0.7 hour) and thinking (0.6 hour).
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To sum up
, both groups would like to put most time
into watching TV. Playing games, socialising and sports are the next three popular activities for young people
, while
reading, communicating, and thinking are more popular for old people
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