The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

#carbon #dioxide #co #emissions #person #kingdom #sweden

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carbon

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dioxide

that

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released per person in four different countries from 1967 to 2007. The United Kingdom

had

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experienced

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a slightly

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slightly

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decrease from approximately 10.4

tonnes

carbon

dioxide

to 10.3 ,

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Sweden

experiences

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had increase

around

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1.5

tonnes

in 1967. They both had the same downward trend till the end of the period.

United

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Kingdom almost 9

tonnes

and Sweden 5.5

tonnes

. The

trend

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trends

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between Italy and Portugal were similar, They

rising

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steadily from 1967 to 2007. in 1967 Italy just over 4

tonnes

, Portugal about 1.7

tonnes

carbon

dioxide

. in 2007 Italy

just

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below 8 tons, Portugal just under 6 tons, The number of tons that Portugal and Sweden had

were

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the same number. In conclusion, The

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that had the most

carbon

dioxide

emission

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emissions

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per person between 1967

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and

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2007 were

United

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the United

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Kingdom, and the lowest

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Countries

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were Portugal and Italy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

carbon dioxide emissions
per person
United Kingdom
Sweden
Italy
Portugal
graph
compare
average
increase
decrease
trend
peak
decline
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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the cause? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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