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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The line graph illustrates
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carbon
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the carbon
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dioxide
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 that
had been
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 released per person in four different countries from 1967 to 2007. The United Kingdom
had
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experienced
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a slightly
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slightly
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 decrease from approximately 10.4
tonnes
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 to 10.3 ,
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However
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However,
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 Sweden
experiences
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 had increase
around
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 1.5
tonnes
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 in 1967. They both had the same downward trend till the end of the period.
United
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The United
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 Kingdom almost 9
tonnes
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 and Sweden 5.5
tonnes
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. The
trend
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 between Italy and Portugal were similar, They
rising
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rose
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 steadily from 1967 to 2007. in 1967 Italy just over 4
tonnes
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, Portugal about 1.7
tonnes
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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. in 2007 Italy
just
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 below 8 tons, Portugal just under 6 tons, The number of tons that Portugal and Sweden had
were
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 the same number. In conclusion, The
Country
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Countries
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 that had the most
carbon
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dioxide
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emission
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emissions
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 per person between 1967
to
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and
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 2007 were
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, and the lowest
Country
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Countries
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 were Portugal and Italy.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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