The charts below show what Uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The presented chart gives information about
graduate
and postgraduate students
in the UK,who did not present in full-time work
after finishing college in 2008.
It can be clearly seen that,
both of the categories show an upward trend in Remove the comma
apply
further
study
.In contrast
, the weakest amount of students
had voluntary work
.
The illustration represent
the differences between the choices of Change the verb form
represents
graduate
students
.There is enormous
discrepancy in the midst of voluntary Add an article
an enormous
work
and further
study
.The number of people, who really
keen on voluntary Add a missing verb
are really
work
is above 3,500.However
, further
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the further
a further
study
had more actuality than other onesFix the agreement mistake
studies
..
There are more than 29 Replace the punctuation
.
...
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
graduate
students
.Part-time work
had an average statistic result as unemployment had.
As shown in the bar graph, postgraduates’s result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
roughly
the same as Add a missing verb
are roughly
graduate
students
.Despite it
, there is Correct pronoun usage
this
fractionally
difference betwixt part-time Correct article usage
a fractionally
work
and further
study
.We can see the level of amount of students
,who did not find a
Remove the article
work
a job
work
during this
period.Submitted by a.seytzhanova on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, work, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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