The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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The line graph illustrates

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to and from the

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(

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abroad by

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residents

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to the

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by overseas

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) from 1979 to 1999,

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the bar chart illustrates the most popular countries visited by

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residents

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( Turkey - Greece - USA - Spain - France ) in 1999. Units are measured in million

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, it is obvious that

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abroad by

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and

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to the

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by overseas

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increased over the given period , but

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abroad by

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were higher.

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, the most popular

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visited by

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was France ,

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the least was Turkey. With regards to,

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, it started more than 10 and

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went up to around 50 in 1979.

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to the

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began at nearly 10 in the first year and

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increased to less than 30 in the final year.

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, when it comes to the most popular countries visited by

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residents

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, France was the most popular

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followed by Spain.As for,

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, the third

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visited by the

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was the USA , followed by Greece.

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, the least

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visited by the

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was Turkey.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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