The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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The line graph illustrates

visits

to and from the

(

visits

abroad by

residents

visits

to the

by overseas

residents

) from 1979 to 1999,

while

the bar chart illustrates the most popular countries visited by

residents

( Turkey - Greece - USA - Spain - France ) in 1999. Units are measured in million

Overall

, it is obvious that

visits

abroad by

residents

and

visits

to the

by overseas

residents

increased over the given period , but

visits

abroad by

residents

were higher.

Moreover

, the most popular

country

visited by

residents

was France ,

while

the least was Turkey. With regards to,

visits

abroad by

residents

, it started more than 10 and

then

went up to around 50 in 1979.

Similarly

visits

to the

by overseas

residents

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

began at nearly 10 in the first year and

then

increased to less than 30 in the final year.

On the other hand

, when it comes to the most popular countries visited by

residents

, France was the most popular

country

followed by Spain.As for,

likewise

, the third

country

visited by the

residents

was the USA , followed by Greece.

Whereas

, the least

country

visited by the

was Turkey.

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