The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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The line graph illustrates

visits

to and from the

(

visits

abroad by

residents

visits

to the

by overseas

residents

) from 1979 to 1999,

while

the bar chart illustrates the most popular countries visited by

residents

( Turkey - Greece - USA - Spain - France ) in 1999. Units are measured in million

Overall

, it is obvious that

visits

abroad by

residents

and

visits

to the

by overseas

residents

increased over the given period , but

visits

abroad by

residents

were higher.

Moreover

, the most popular

country

visited by

residents

was France ,

while

the least was Turkey. With regards to,

visits

abroad by

residents

, it started more than 10 and

then

went up to around 50 in 1979.

Similarly

visits

to the

by overseas

residents

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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began at nearly 10 in the first year and

then

increased to less than 30 in the final year.

On the other hand

, when it comes to the most popular countries visited by

residents

, France was the most popular

country

followed by Spain.As for,

likewise

, the third

country

visited by the

residents

was the USA , followed by Greece.

Whereas

, the least

country

visited by the

was Turkey.

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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

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