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Writing Samples
Band 1

Many people argue that smoking should be banned due to its harmful effects on human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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smoking is one of the worst things
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ever smoking bad and
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 agree on that ,smoking
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bad
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 thing but why
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 allowed? because of the business and the economy of the country
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advantages
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 of smoking
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is the health care
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 gonna be good and we will see a lot of
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differences
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differences
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teenagers
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 we will solve the
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population
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problem
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make
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the
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people angry
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anything
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have
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 advantages and disadvantages even the bad things like smoking as we said
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 you can
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smoking
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 you can feel happy and glad
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I'm
 not supporting you to
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 just say some
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benefits
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totaly
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totally
agreed
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with
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 we should
banned
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smoking
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 the best choice for the future
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Develop a more structured introduction that clearly outlines the main points you will discuss.
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Provide specific examples or statistics to support your points. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs for better coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs with one main idea per paragraph. This will improve logical structure.
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Work on grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas more clearly and accurately.
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You have included an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your argument.
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Your essay conveys a clear stance on the issue, which is important for task achievement.
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Your engagement with both sides of the argument, even briefly, shows an attempt to look at the issue from multiple perspectives.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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