Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own law. Discuss both view and give your opinion .
Law
is a foundation to
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for
the
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apply
countries
worldwide. Although
many people believe that a single law
system
brings many advantages to all countries
around the world, others argue that each nations
must have Change to a singular noun
nation
their
own constitutional practice. Correct pronoun usage
its
This
essay will explain both views and give my personal opinion.
On the one hand, a unified legal system
may have a slight advantage to the societies. However
, it will not suitable
for many Add a missing verb
be suitable
countries
with their specialties. For instances
, several nations have agreed to legalize LGBT marriage. But, Fix the agreement mistake
instance
this
law
will definitely inapplicable
to Add a missing verb
be inapplicable
muslim-majority
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Muslim-majority
countries
due to
the mismatch between the country and religious law
. Another example, monarch countries
have their own legal system
to choose their leader based on patrilinear line
. If Fix the agreement mistake
lines
this
monarch system
applies to current democratic countries
, there will be a mass protest due to
the nepotism of president's
son Correct article usage
the president's
that
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who
become
the next leader.
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becomes
In contrast
, giving a
freedom to every country to choose their own legal Remove the article
apply
system
brings more impact to the societies rather that
a single legal Correct word choice
than
system
. Muslim countries
like Maldives can apply Islamic
legal Correct article usage
an Islamic
system
or
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and
Catholics
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Catholic
countries
like Vatican
can Correct article usage
the Vatican
also
have their
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the
rights
to use a Fix the agreement mistake
right
Catholics
Replace the word
Catholic
law
practice. Having a different law
for every countries
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country
wil
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will
beneficial
for Add a missing verb
be beneficial
a multicultural
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multicultural countries
a multicultural country
countries
as well. Indonesia, as a multicultural and multiethnic country, have
some special regions that Change the verb form
has
needs
to have their own Change the verb form
need
law
, which is Aceh for the Islamic law
, and Yogyakarta for their monarch sultanate legal system
. GivingCorrect pronoun usage
them a
a
freedom to choose their own Correct article usage
the
law
will make it easier for Indonesia to adapt with
their cultural diversity.
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to
To sum up
, while
many people think that a unified law
sistem
across the world will bring more valuable impact, I firmly believe that letting each Correct your spelling
system
nations
Change to a singular noun
nation
to
determine Fix the infinitive
apply
their
own respective Correct pronoun usage
its
law
will bring more massive and significant advantages to people.Submitted by azkaalazkiya97 on
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