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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram above outlines the production and processing of coal used to generate
electricity
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. In
general
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general,
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 there are 4 steps
how
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electricity
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 from coal can be distributed to homes and industries as the customers: mining and extraction, transportation, generation and transmissions and distribution. Coal is
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firstly
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first
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 mined from below the
earth
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earth's
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 surface. The extracted coal is
then
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 sent to the crushing facility where it will be broken into smaller and uniform
size
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. After that, the crushed coal is placed in the stockpile before being transported to the
power
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plant
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 by trucks. In the
power
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plant
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, the coal will entered
firstly
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 into
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a gassifier
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gassifier
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gasifier
 for combustion. In
this
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plant
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, coal is burnt to generate
gas
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 that will be sent to the
gas
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power
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plant
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.
However
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,
this
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gas
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 will go through
cooling
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a cooling
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 system prior to
enter
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entering
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 the
gas
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power
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plant
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. From
gasification
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the gasification
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 process, there are
also
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 produced the
offgas
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off-gas
 which is exhausted
thourgh
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through
 a chimney and solid waste that should be sent to a treatment facility. In the
gas
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power
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plant
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, the coal
gas
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 will be used to drive the turbines and generate
electricity
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. The produced
electricity
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 is
then
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 saved in the substation before distributing it to the customers.
In addition
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, to the
electricity
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, the
power
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plant
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also
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 generates a by-product namely heat waste which can be disposed of or recovered as a new resource of energy.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, firstly".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, plant, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hopper
  • pulverizing mill
  • combustion
  • boiler
  • steam
  • turbine
  • generator
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • transmitted
  • power lines
  • efficiency
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