In many countries , the number of animals and plants is declining . Why do you think this is happening ? How can this issue be solved ?

Needless to say, the extinction of trees and
animals
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of countries. The upcoming paragraphs will examine its causes and suggest some remedial measures. Among the numerous reasons, there are two clear corresponding factors of declining
animals
and plants. One would be the migration of people to urban centres. Simply put, governmental bodies are providing all the basic amenities
such
as transportation facilities, better educational institutes, and many more, to cities, making
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of individuals to reside in these places which
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the authorities to construct new houses by cutting more plants.
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, less backyard space
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residents
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trees. Coming to
animals
, scientists are using some particular
animals
for making medicines and doing some experiments, leading to make them believe that
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will be true for the well-being of humans. Take mice as an illustration, mice
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used to gather medicine to cure cancer
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in patients. There are some workable solutions to resolve
this
concern to save
animals
and plants. The prime solution is to encourage people to live in countryside areas. In essence, authorities must organise some awareness campaigns to educate the public
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not relocating
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cities, resulting in more vacant spaces
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there and there will be no need to go for deforestation
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housing issues. Another would be to implement some stringent rules and regulations on research regarding
animals
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of animal testing
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not
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for treating
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human
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.
This
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more and more
animals
which are on the verge of extinction.
To conclude
,
although
cutting more trees to construct new buildings and using
animals
for finding
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new medicines appear to be
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cause of their disappearance, I believe officials should motivate people to stay in villages and some other measures should be adopted to find medicines despite using
animals
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • pollution control
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • overexploitation
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • quarantine measures
  • eradication programs
  • public awareness campaigns
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • natural habitats
  • species decline
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