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Some people think it w more effective for students to study in grou while others believe that it is better for them to study alone.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Few individuals believe that it is more beneficial for many
students
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 others think that studying alone is better than
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studying
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 essay I will discuss both points of view,as far as
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 concerned, I strongly agree with the latter notion. Starting with the first point of view,it is very effective to
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,because in collaborative
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students
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 explore more
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 about their course and sharpen their critical thinking skills
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 feel more confident and relaxed because they become able to know their strengths and weakness.when there are multiple conflicts and
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group
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,
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 must decipher which
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 are the best.
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 has more impact on academic achievement than an individual
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.so
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 discussions can lead to significant shifts in opinions. Moving towards the latter notion,
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 alone makes
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 to be more focused and effective in learning.so
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 able to get more insight about their course work without any distractions and get plenty of work done in one setting.
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, self-learning lets
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learn a new skill and work at a faster pace than usual in problem-solving.
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one
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has shown that
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 alone increased the brain's ability to focus on their subject.
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 it is more beneficial to
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, both views
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 their own pros and cons.In
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study
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,
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 can explore more
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while
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study
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students
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 can learn more effectively
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 I strongly agree with the notion that
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 enables
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 to be more focused.
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grammar
It is important to proofread your essay for grammatical errors and typos. Phrases like 'study in batch' should be corrected to 'study in a group.' Additionally, make sure your sentences flow smoothly, as some punctuation is missing or misplaced.
structure
While your ideas are clear, they can be more effectively organized. Try to clearly separate your points with paragraphs and ensure each paragraph starts with a topic sentence that summarizes the main idea.
examples
Providing more specific examples could help strengthen your argument. Try to include relevant, well-explained instances that illustrate your points in greater detail.
conclusion
Your conclusion summarizes both points of view well but could be stronger with a more definitive statement about your opinion. Clarifying why you prefer self-study, with a brief summary of key points, can make your conclusion more impactful.
content
You have presented a balanced discussion of both views, which demonstrates a good understanding of the topic.
clarity
Your argument that self-study allows for more focused and effective learning is well-expressed and supported by relevant points.
structure
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion that address the prompt effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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