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the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table below shows data about different consumer spending in five different countries in 2002. Generally, people from
Turkey
 spend their money mostly on Food/Drinks/Tobacco and leisure/Education,
while
 Italy citizens spend
to
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the
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Clothing/Footwear.
Firstly
, as we can see from the table citizens of Ireland and
Turkey
 spend money on Food/drinks/Tobacco
in
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the
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a
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 similar level, which is 28.91 per
cent
 and 32.14 per
cent
 respectively.
On the other hand
 people from the other three countries (Italy, Spain, Sweden) spend
many
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 less than citizens of
Turkey
 and Ireland, especially less to the nearly 10-12 per
cent
.
However
, the country that spends mostly on
the
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Clothing/Footwear was Italy with 9 per
cent
. Countries like Ireland, Spain and
Turkey
 have
similar
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 percentage which is around 6.5 per
cent
,
while
 Sweden is slightly less (5.40 per
cent
).
In addition
, on
the
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top of
spendings
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spending
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to
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the
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Leisure/Education was
also
Turkey
 with 4.35 per
cent
. Next
is
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are
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 Sweden and Italy which
has
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have
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 slightly similar
index
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indexes
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, 3.20 and 3.22 per
cent
 respectively.
On the
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 third
plays
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play
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is
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in
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 Spain which has
significant
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a significant
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 difference in
the
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spending (1.98 per
cent
).
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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