The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The pictures above depict the stages of how
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is produced and how the
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is
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used in concrete production. The left diagram shows limestone and clay on top of a fan-shaped machine, side by side. It is
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crushed by a crusher until it becomes a powder. It will
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move to the mixer machine, where it will be mixed to make it have a balance ratio. After mixing, the substance will go through the rotating heater, which in the image is heated directly by fire. After the heating process, it will be crushed again by the grinder, until it becomes the
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we usually buy in shops in the shape of bags. The right diagram shows that to make a perfect blend of concrete mixture, we need several ingredients with the perfect ratio. It is shown that there will need to be 15% of
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, 10% of water, 25% of sand, and 50% of gravel. It will
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be mixed with a machine called Concrete mixer. There is
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a note in the bottom right diagram that tells the reader that gravel equals small stones. In conclusion,
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is produced first than concrete, as to make concrete you need
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.
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proves that both of them are impartial and are interconnected to one another.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quarrying
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • grinding
  • kiln
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • building materials
  • limestone
  • clay
  • fine powder
  • rotating
  • cooling
  • hydration
  • aggregate
  • compression
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