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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The
two
 maps above depict information about the location of a
college
 in
years
Correct article usage
the years
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 2006 and now.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are some changes and some areas
also
 removed or transformed into
an
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apply
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another area.
First,
the road
is still maintain
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is still maintained
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 without any changes and it same goes
to
Change preposition
for
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sports
Correct article usage
the sports
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 field
also
college
Correct article usage
the college
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 building 2.
On the other hand
, the place for trees was reduced. The area must
share
Wrong verb form
be shared
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 with other sites,
such
 as bus
stop
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stops
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 and
library
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libraries
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.
Furthermore
, in 2006, there
was
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were
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 only
two
 pathways to go to
college
 building 1 and
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 park, but now there are more than 5 roads to go there. Afterwards, the size of
car
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the car
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 park was decreased.
In addition
, the area was divided into
two
 places,
car
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a car
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 park and bike storage.
Moreover
,
library
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the library
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 was replaced and located among
two
college
 buildings.
Additionally
,
sports
Correct article usage
a sports
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 centre was added.
Last
, a small tree still
remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
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on
Change preposition
in
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 its position in which on the right centre.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, college with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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