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The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human population in four Asian Countries. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main cities from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040.

The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human population in four Asian Countries. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main cities from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040.
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The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human
population
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 in four Asian
Countries
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. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main
cities
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 from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040. It is clear from the data shown in the graph that all four
asian
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Asian
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countries
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population
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 living in
cities
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 from 1970 to 2040 has increased. The highest increased
population
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 from 1970 to 2040 living in
cities
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 from all
the
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four Asia
countries
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 is Indonesia and Malaysia. These two
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has
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 similarities with no decreased
population
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 throughout the years. Its
population
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 that
are
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is
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 living in
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 has significantly increased from 1970 to 2040,
while
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Philipines
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the Philipines
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 and Thailand
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 some decreased
on
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in
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population
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throughout
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from
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 1970 to 2040. Indonesia
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started its
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 in 1970
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at
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 12% and increased
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 60% in 2040, Malaysia in 1970 has 30% and had a significant
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 to 80% in the year
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2040.
Thailand
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Thailand's
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population
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 in
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1970 is about 18% and in
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2040 it has reached around 48% of its
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 living in
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,
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 but not least Philipines from 32% to 48% of its
population
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 living in
cities
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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