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The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human population in four Asian Countries. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main cities from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040.

The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human population in four Asian Countries. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main cities from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040.
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The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human
population
 in four Asian
Countries
. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main
cities
 from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040. It is clear from the data shown in the graph that all four
asian
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Asian
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countries
population
 living in
cities
 from 1970 to 2040 has increased. The highest increased
population
 from 1970 to 2040 living in
cities
 from all
the
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apply
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four Asia
countries
 is Indonesia and Malaysia. These two
countries
has
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have
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 similarities with no decreased
population
 throughout the years. Its
population
 that
are
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is
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 living in
cities
 has significantly increased from 1970 to 2040,
while
Philipines
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the Philipines
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 and Thailand
has
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have
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 some decreased
on
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in
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population
throughout
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from
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 1970 to 2040. Indonesia
has
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started its
population
 in 1970
from
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at
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 12% and increased
into
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to
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 60% in 2040, Malaysia in 1970 has 30% and had a significant
increased
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increase
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 to 80% in the year
of
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apply
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2040.
Thailand
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Thailand's
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population
 in
the
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1970 is about 18% and in
the
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2040 it has reached around 48% of its
population
 living in
cities
,
last
 but not least Philipines from 32% to 48% of its
population
 living in
cities
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