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The line graph shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years.

The line graph shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years.
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The illustration indicates the notion of the satisfaction rate of medical services in four different regions in three years.
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, it can be seen that the figures were steady in the United Kingdom, the US, and the Netherlands.
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, in
Canada
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 there was a clear vibration in the numbers.
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 what is depicted, in 1991, nearly 60% of Canadians were satisfied
by
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 the healthcare system. Obviously, the level plummeted to 20% in 1998.
In addition
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, there
was
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not
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no
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 clear changes in the UK, the healthcare program was almost the same with
average
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 of 25% for the three years. In 1991, the Netherlands registered less than 50% of acceptable healthcare
system
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systems
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. Following that, in 1998 it had a small
increasing
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 with
2
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% or 3%
increasing
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.
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, in the UK, in 1991 and 1998, the proportion was similar, it was equally 10%.
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, the UK was the lowest country in that duration.

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