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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse- gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse- gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the pie charts depicts the distribution of
energy
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 utilization in Australian households.
In addition
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, the charts demonstrate the amount of
greenhouse
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gas
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that is
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 released after the mentioned activities.
Overall
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, heating has the highest percentage of
energy
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using
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 compared to the other items.
In contrast
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, a negligible 2% of
energy
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that
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is used for cooling.
Moreover
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, water heating has the most considerable role in
greenhouse
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gas
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 production in Australia. As the abovementioned, heating with a staggering 42% has the most proportion. In terms of
energy
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 usage, water heating is the second with 30%. Not only does cooling
has
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 a negligible proportion in the
energy
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 use, but lighting
also
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, with only 4%
energy
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 usage, has a negligible role. A significant 32% of highlighted
gas
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 is generated by water heating.
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, 28% of
greenhouse
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gas
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 emissions are related to other applications. Cooling, with just 3%,
greenhouse
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 generation has the most minor role in
this
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 term.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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