The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The differences in
production
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the production
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of
three
products in a garment factory between the years 1990 and 2010
is
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are
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demonstrated in the graph below. Overview, all of the
three
products are more produced in 2010 than they were in the 90's.
Although
coats
were the least produced product in 1990, it has successfully
became
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the most produced product out of all
three
products in 2010. Suits were the most produced clothes back in 1990. About fifteen
miliion
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million
suits were produced during that year. The
production
of suits increased to
it's
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its
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highest peak in 1995 . Later on, it decreased
then
icreased
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increased
again until it became the second
least produced
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least-produced
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product in the garment factory in 2010.
On the other hand
,
coats
and
dresses
were the least produced clothes in 1990. There were only about 7 million
coats
produced at the time,
while
the
production
of
dresses
was slightly higher by about
three
millions
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million
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. The
production
of both of the clothes increased
through out
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throughout
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the years but the
production
of
coats
had the sharpest increase. It became the
most produced
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most-produced
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cloth in the factory by 2010.
Dresses
had a minimal increase in
production
through out
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throughout
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the years and there were barely fifteen million
dresses
produced in the year 2010.
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