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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart gives information about the selected countries that
British
 people emigrated to between 2004 and 2007.
Overall
, there are fluctuating trends in destinations. At the beginning of the period, in 2004, The majority of
British
 people emigrated to Australia about 40
thousand
. The second-ranked is Spain around 35
thousand
. Followed by The United States of America about 25
thousand
. New Zealand and
France
also
 in the same figure around 21
thousand
 consecutively.
However
, The trend of emigration destinations of
British
 was change. Australia is the first-ranked destination for
British
 emigrants. In 2006, the number of
British
 emigrants rose significantly to 52
thousand
. Followed by Spain which increased to 36
thousand
. Meanwhile,
France
 is more popular among the emigrants. The figure of
British
 people who emigrated to
France
 increased to 35
thousand
.
Nevertheless
, in 2007. The figure for
British
 emigration was changed.
In particular
,
France
 decreased dramatically by just around 18
thousand
, which is the lowest number of
British
 emigrants’ destinations.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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