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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen or pencil . What are the reasons for this? Is this positive or a negative development.

#people #hand #pen #pencil #development
Nowadays
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 and
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 are being used by small numbers of
people
. The development of technology is one of the many reasons behind
this
 trend. In my
opinion
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 It is a
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positive
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 step. In recent years technology is increasing rapidly.
For
this
reason
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reason,
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 some
people
 stopped to use physical resources like
pen
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 and
pencil
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pencils
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 to
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write
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. Most of them prefer to
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write
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 on their phones or other gadgets. Even some exams are being taken online on computers.
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 there are some groups of telephone users who even do not type
message
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messages
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. They usually use auto typers. All they need to do is speak and record their voice. Ai will
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 their words. There are several
benefIts
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 of getting rid
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pen
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 and
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.
First
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 and biggest advantage is
environment
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the environment
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.
For
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 It is not news that for making pencils, lots of trees are being cut. If
people
 stop using them It will save amount number of forests.
Secondly
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 hard to keep
paper based
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 information for decades which
were
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wrItten
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written
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 by
pencil
 or
pens
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.
Whereas
 online data can be kept
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.
Moreover
,
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handwrIting
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handwriting
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 of most
people
 is unclear and It can be misunderstood
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To conclude
,
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handwriting
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 is not popular among
people
 now. The convenience of typing and being readable by anyone are the main reasons that fewer
people
 use a
pen
 or
pencil
. It
also
 contributes to saving the environment which is a
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events
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. I personally recommend that everybody should learn to type
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task achievement
Ensure to address both parts of the question in detail. You have explained why fewer people write by hand and have partially covered the positive aspects but could delve a bit deeper into potential negative consequences to present a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your essay by using transition words and phrases more effectively. For example, use 'in addition,' 'furthermore,' or 'moreover' to connect ideas smoothly. Additionally, aim to develop more fully-developed paragraphs with topic sentences for clearer structure.
task achievement
You have clearly addressed the reasons for the decline in using pen and pencil, linking it well to technological advancement.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in providing a framework to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Convenience
  • Efficiency
  • Curriculums
  • Environmental benefits
  • Productivity
  • Accessibility
  • Cognitive development
  • Personal touch
  • Overreliance
  • Data insecurity
  • Privacy issues
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