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The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates the amount of monetary aid that China, Indonesia, Thailand and South Africa received and how it was spent in
fourty
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forty
four
 years period of time from 1974 to 2014.
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,
while
amount
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the amount
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 of money that was spent
for
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 medicine and finance was slightly decreased,
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the expense
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expense
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expenses
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for
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of
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 catering
was
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sharply declined. In 1974, most of
financial
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the financial
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 aid was
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 medicine
which is
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,
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 80 million
while
 70 million
as
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was
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 spent on catering and finance respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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