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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#show #percentages #men #women #employment #four #countries #summaries #information #features #comparison
The data in the
given
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apply
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bar graph illustrates the statistics of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 working under the age group of 60 to 64 in the year 1970 and in 2000 where the
mention
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mentioned
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 cities are Belgium,
USA
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the USA
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,
Japan
 and Australia
To begin
 with, in view of men, In 1970 under the category of 60 to 64
Japan
 shows
maximum
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the maximum
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 percentage of men working standing at 85% followed by Belgium and Australia
79
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at 79
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 % and 76% respectively.
USA
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The USA
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had
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experienced less
employment
 12% than
Japan
.
Conversely
,in 2000 Belgium showed a drastic change in
employment
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the employment
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 sector
campare
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compared
 to1970 it reflects
60
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a 60
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% decline. In 2000
Japan
 was
number
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the number
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 in
employment
 and
then
USA
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the USA
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 and Australia. In
Case
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the Case
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 of women, It can be seen
in
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that
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Japan
 and
USA
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the USA
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 had
highest
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the highest
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 number of women
employment
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employed
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 in both
year
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years
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. In
case
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the case
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 of
former
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the former
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 country it
display
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displayed
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 43% in 1970 and 40% in 2000 and in
latter
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the latter
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 country it aho
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