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Band 4.5

Write about the following topic: 'Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people's lives and should receive more funding.' To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, print media invests more money for
publsihing
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publishing
 global
news
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.
But
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, it is argued that
the
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apply
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domestic
news
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deserve
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deserves
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 more coverage and funding.
This
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 essay agrees with
this
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 statement as it is the only source of
news
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 and it improves the relationship between
government
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the government
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 and
its'
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its
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 citizens.
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, In most
of
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the
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apply
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countries,
newspaers
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newspapers
 are the
soley
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sole
solely
 source of
news
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.
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, they should prioritize informing
people
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 about what is happening in the
country
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 rather
informing
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than informing
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 about what is going on
ountside
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outside
 of the
country
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. Because
,
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 local incidents affect their lives significantly. Not knowing about their own issues
make
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makes
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 them aliens of the
country
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.
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, some
people
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 get to know about the tourist destinations of their own
country
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 only after seeing a video uploaded by a tourist.
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,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is a main medium of communication between the
people
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 and their
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governemnt
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government
. It is
a
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the
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 responsibility of
a
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apply
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print media to make aware
people
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about
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of
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 the
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governemnt's
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government's
 investments, job opportunities, services, and any public announcements.
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, in some countries, the
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governemnt
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government
 gazettes are only released in newspapers.
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, it should publish the issues faced by the
people
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 in the
country
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 to force the
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governemnt
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government
 to take action against them as print media work closely with local
people
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 through local reporters. In conclusion, newspapers should invest more money
on
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in
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 covering local
news
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 as they have a duty to educate the public about the local
news
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 and to maintain a harmonious relationship between the
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governemnt
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government
 and
its'
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its
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 citizens.
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grammar
Ensure that spelling and grammatical errors are minimized. For example, 'publsihing' should be 'publishing', 'deserve' should be 'deserves', and 'governemnt' should be 'government'. Minor errors can disrupt the reader's flow and understanding.
content
Expand on your examples and provide more specific details. While the ideas are clear, supporting them with more specific and relevant examples would strengthen your arguments. For instance, mentioning specific local issues or services covered by newspapers could add depth.
cohesion
Provide a clearer transition between paragraphs, especially when shifting from one main point to another. This enhances readability and makes your argument more cohesive.
introduction
Your introduction is strong and clearly states your position on the topic. It effectively outlines the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay and reinforces your stance on the issue.
structure
You have logically structured the paragraphs, ensuring that each paragraph discusses a separate point. This organization helps in presenting a coherent argument.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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