Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic. Do you agree or disagree?

Whilst the advantages of
air
travel
were visible, there were
also
disadvantages that arose from
this
mode of transportation, specifically,
air
pollution
. It is believed by some people that increasing
fare
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for
air
travel
would
reduced
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the
pollution
to the environment. It is disagreed that an increase
on
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in
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price
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the price
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of
air
tickets would give solutions to the problem as travelling
through
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by
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air
have
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big
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impact on the economic state of the world.
Firstly
,
air
travel
still
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the fastest way to go to places in a short period of time.The people can go to different places away from home without travelling too long and commodities were be delivered on time.
For example
, during the covid- 19 in 2020, there were no
vaccine
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available in the market for us,
we
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so we
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need
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to buy from
other country
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the vaccine needed to cure the disease. It will take time to reach our country if it is not delivered through
air
travel
.
Secondly
, it is already proven that
air
travel
has
big
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impact on the economic state.
For instance
, the taxes
come
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from an
air
travel
company would benefit the economy and can be used for other improvements of the government.
In addition
to that, it is unsure that the increase in
air
tickets would hinder
the
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people
to
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from travelling
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travel
as travelling is very essential nowadays. In conclusion, it is disagreed that
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increased
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for
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in
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air
tickets will be imposed to reduce
air
pollution
, but, the authority handling
this
can do some solutions regarding the problem of
pollution
.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental pollution
  • deterrent
  • aviation technologies
  • disproportionately affect
  • global carbon tax
  • alternative solutions
  • tourism-dependent economies
  • cleaner fuels
  • efficient flight paths
  • carbon emissions
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