The pictures of pie charts and table show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

The pictures of pie charts and table show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.
The table gives a brief account of
average
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the average
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British household salary and spending
a
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on a
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range of items, and the pie chart elaborates on the
monetory
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monetary
allocation to each of the products in 2010 and 2013. As can be seen, despite a descending resultant trend for
the
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salary, a family's spending on
food
and clothes had slightly increased by 2013. Most notably, the ratio of fruits and vegetables surged in 2013. Throughout 2010-13, the total income of a British family witnessed a decrease
4000£
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of 4000£
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, reaching a low of 25000£.
In contrast
, their expenditure on
food
and clothes showed a hike of £1000 from £14000 to £15000 in 2013. On analyzing the spending on
food
and clothes, by the beginning of the concerned period, a rather great share of expenses belonged to buying fruits and vegetables, and meat and fish.
However
, the proportion of both declined by 10% which reached 12% and 15% respectively in 2013.
On the contrary
, by 2013 expenditure on fruits and vegetables was reported to be
slighly
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slightly
over one-third of the
espenses
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expenses
due to
a 15% rise in its consumption. Taking dairy products
in
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consideration, there was a 5% upsurge in the expenses in comparison to 15% in 2010.
In contrast
, the figure for other
food
and drinks remained stable at 18% throughout the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average income
  • spending habits
  • proportion
  • cost of living
  • economic changes
  • cultural factors
  • standard of living
  • economic health
  • leftover income
  • savings
  • expenses
  • financial trends
  • value for money
  • economic forecasts
  • significant increase/decrease
  • spending patterns
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