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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two given charts illustrate the three different types of
dance
classes
 for the young generation under 17
year-old
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 and where they take place in a city in Australia.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that most of the
dance
classes
 are taught in
the
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private studios.
Additionally
,
the
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ballet is the most popular
type
 of
dances
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dance
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, especially for children under 11
year-old
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years old
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. Regarding the situation of
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classes
, the figure for the private studios accounts for 48%, nearly
a
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half,
while
 that for the college-based studios stands at a mere 10%.
Furthermore
, the proportion of
classes
 organized in community halls and school halls
are
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at
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18% and 24% respectively. In terms of types of
dance
classes
 based on two age groups, it could be clearly seen that children under 11 have a tendency to participate in
the
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ballet
classes
, there are 600
students
 choosing
this
type
 of
dance
classes
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class
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. It is
also
 worth noting that the number of kids under 11 in the ballet
classes
 and teenagers from 11 to 16 in the modern
classes
 have the same number, specifically at 300
students
. It is interesting to note that the modern class is the
most
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favorite
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type
 of
dance
 of teenagers from 11 to
16 year-old
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16-year-old
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, which stands at more
500
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than 500
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students
. Looking at the tap
classes
,
this
type
 of
dance
 has
nearly
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 similar number of members in both two age ranges, at around 400
students
 for each group.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, type, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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