The below diagram show the generation of hydro-electirc power from water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relecant.

The below diagram show the generation of hydro-electirc power from water.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relecant.
The diagram illustrates the process of
hydro-electric
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hydroelectric
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power generation from
water
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the water
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source, starting from
water
in the sea is evaporated by heating and ending with electric
energy
is
trasported
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transported
to essential infrastructures.
Initially
,
sun
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heat evaporates sea
water
forming a cloud, which
then
raining
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into a
water
reservoir
creating
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created
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from
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a dam. After that,
large
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a large
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amount of
water
influxs
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influx
influxes
into a turbine by the opening of
valve
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a valve
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. Once the turbine spins
due to
a high flow of
water
, it
then
generates electricity which is transported by high
voltage
cables from the dam to
transformer
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the transformer
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station. the remained
water
is recycled
to
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water
storage by
pump
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the pump
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.
Following
this
,
this
station converts
a
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high
voltage
energy
to
low
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a low
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voltage
that
suitable
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is suitable
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for
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
. In the final step,
low
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low-voltage
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voltage
electrical
energy
run
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through underground cables to crucial infrastructures including hospitals, schools, factories and houses. In summary,
this
production of
hydro-electric
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hydroelectric
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power
beginning
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with the evaporation of
sea
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seawater
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water
to
providing
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provide
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low
voltage
electrical
energy
by underground cables from transformer station to buildings.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, energy, voltage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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