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The below diagram show the generation of hydro-electirc power from water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relecant.

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The diagram illustrates the process of
hydro-electric
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hydroelectric
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 power generation from
water
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the water
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 source, starting from
water
 in the sea is evaporated by heating and ending with electric
energy
 is
trasported
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transported
 to essential infrastructures.
Initially
,
sun
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sun's
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 heat evaporates sea
water
 forming a cloud, which
then
raining
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rains
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 into a
water
 reservoir
creating
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created
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from
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by
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 a dam. After that,
large
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a large
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 amount of
water
influxs
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influx
influxes
 into a turbine by the opening of
valve
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a valve
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. Once the turbine spins
due to
 a high flow of
water
, it
then
 generates electricity which is transported by high
voltage
 cables from the dam to
transformer
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the transformer
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 station. the remained
water
 is recycled
to
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for
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water
 storage by
pump
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the pump
a pump
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.
Following
this
,
this
 station converts
a
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apply
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high
voltage
energy
 to
low
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a low
the low
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voltage
 that
suitable
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is suitable
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 for
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
. In the final step,
low
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low-voltage
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voltage
 electrical
energy
run
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runs
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 through underground cables to crucial infrastructures including hospitals, schools, factories and houses. In summary,
this
 production of
hydro-electric
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hydroelectric
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 power
beginning
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begins
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 with the evaporation of
sea
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seawater
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water
 to
providing
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provide
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 low
voltage
 electrical
energy
 by underground cables from transformer station to buildings.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, energy, voltage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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