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The map below show the centre of a small twon called Islip as it is now, plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The map below show the centre of a small twon called Islip as it is now, plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the
centre
 of a small town called Islip in the present day compared to the future planned development of
this
 town.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
centre
area
 will be improved by
construction
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the construction
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 of the new building.
Additionally
, the former main
road
 will be removed with
new
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a new
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dual carriageway
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dual-carriageway
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 roundabout. Nowadays, the
centre
area
 is occupied by accommodations on the south of the main
road
, which is surrounded by shops along both sides. In the north part, there is a countryside
area
 separated by an avenue. The school is located in
southwest
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the southwest
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 and the park is located in
southeast
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the southeast
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area
 connected by an extended
road
 from the main
road
.
According to
 the future plan, the main
road
 will be replaced with
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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area
,
while
 the former extended
road
 will form a roundabout with a dual carriageway, surrounding the
centre
area
. The essential
structure
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structures
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 including a park, school and old house
area
 will exist.
However
, the countryside
area
 will be replaced by a bus station, shopping
centre
, car park and new housing for accommodation with
further
 citizens.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, area, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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