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El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.

El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.
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The two diagrams given depict the discrepancies between normal and El Nino
conditions
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 in the Pacific Ocean. In general, it can be clearly seen that several diversities were recorded. Most noticeable
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 the efficiency in the industries when the
conditions
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 change. Looking at the representations in more detail, in normal
conditions
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, weak winds come from the West Pacific,
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 the East Pacific causes strong trade
ones
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. Winds
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from the East lead to the increase in cool
water
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 elevation, making the ocean current of warm
water
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 go towards the West.
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, the storm clouds tend to go to the westside because of the influence of strong trade winds.
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, sunny weather
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 a huge amount of nutrients in cool
water
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 become the prominent majors in the development of fishery in Peru.
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, Australia’s agriculture
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 has great effects from the rain
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 made by storm clouds. During El Nino
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, there is an opposite in winds’ directions compared to those of normal
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: strong in the West and weak in the East. That transition makes the warm
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 being pushed eastwards, leading to a reduction in nutrients in Peruvian waters.
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also
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 resulted in storm clouds, causing an underdevelopment in the fishing industry in Peru. Because of the lack of rain weather in Australia, trees have to experience an extreme drought.
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